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She weeps with tears as pure as any spring,
Unveiling hidden hearts, and now you see
That she is fairest over everything:
Every moment fades from memory.
Kind is she, but you are kinder still
In sweet embraces and romantic will.

Does every happy moment stay within the waves?
Ask you with kisses, breathing for her too:

Now you become the link to air that saves,
Eternal love submerged in waters blue.
A poem I wrote a while ago based off the famous Macalania Woods scene from FFX. [link] This scene sends shivers down my spine every time I watch it.
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Critique by Phiatoz Dec 6, 2012, 1:33:33 AM
This is a beautiful piece that will certainly get some on to think on it. I wonder why only a few notice this? Certainly I didn't!

It's like we can envision some sort or fantasy- like scene when we read every word per line.

"Does every happy moment stay within the waves?" Now, that is a very excellent question! Does it,really? Does it not? How should I know? >_<

all in all, I like/ love this piece very much. Does this describe a mythical being? Even if it doesn't, I feel that it is.

And why the heckz did I miss that link?!

Loved it!
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Cupcake-dreamer Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfectly describes my favourite FFX moment, and I love that you've worked the title of the theme song into it
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TheDorsai Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Had you not bolded the first letter of each line, I wouldn't have known it was an acrostic poem. Well done.
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