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Op. 21, no. 5
Diary


O learn to read what silent love hath writ
Upon this daily diary of my heart!
No diatribe or deprecating wit
Remains in sheets that I have torn apart.
The new has mended well in crisp white pages
Ready for the fountain pen of hope
To make its mark, that perhaps future ages
Could see how overarching is His scope.
My love, I know each day you pour your verse
Unwritten on your heart in words unseen.
Both rambling thoughts or fixed forms terse,
Of every syllable I'll gladly glean.
Though artistry might stand to condescend,
I'd give all canon just to be your friend.
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This is Op. 21, no. 5. Based on Shakespeare's sonnet 23: "As an unperfect actor on the stage." To my future wife.
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I love this, but line 5 needs one more syllable. (I am sure that this is a simple oversight and will not be difficult to fix)

beyond that it is wonderful, and it does have "the bard's" feel to it. :)
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*Parsat Apr 4, 2012  Student Writer
Ah yes, I see it now. Thanks for the tip; I'll be putting on the brainstorming cap!
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=deinktvis Apr 3, 2012  Student Writer
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!li1121 Apr 3, 2012  Student Writer
I haven't mentioned your awesomeness of late, but yeah...
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