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Op. 26, no. 1
Keeping Watch


It is my love that keeps mine eye awake,
Alert to all the shadows in the dark,
The principalities that cruelly take
And plunder everything with beauty's mark.
To play the watchman ever for thy sake,
My love, who fills my soul and all my being,
I watch and gladly wait, though still opaque
The future is, resistant to my seeing.
But when the dawn at last will show its face,
Would all our hopes then happily conclude
That all we feared could not have stood in place
Before the force that leaves all things subdued.
That force is love that cultivated grows,
Which gives and gives until it overflows.
I decided to start a new collection because I think I have finished all I want to say for One Body (op. 25). This new collection, Inner Man (op. 26), is the first non-thematic sonnet sequence since the Kindle Sonnets, which I think will be good for my purposes.

This is based off of Shakespeare's 61st sonnet, "Is it thy will, thy image should keep open". Day 13 of NaPoWriMo.

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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Student Writer
One of your best, I think. 
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Parsat Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
Tried to branch out a bit with the rhyme. Been feeling a little too familiar with my rhymes lately.
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
I can tell--opaque, being, etc. I liked it. I need to do the same.
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